Things I Didn't Know I Loved*

* If you are a dreamer, come in.
If you are a dreamer, a wisher, a liar,
A hope-er, a pray-er, a magic bean buyer...
If you're a pretender, come sit by my fire
For we have some flax-golden tales to spin.
Come in! Come in!
(Shel Silverstein)

September 09, 2006

Nostalgia

Another haiku'd (high cooed?) thought - this time, on nostalgia. 97% guaranteed literal and non-metaphoric, HV, bromise!

I am gonna miss
Egyptian men if I leave.
I won't if I don't.

posted by Reformed Cynic # 12:02 AM

Comments:

Not only do you have serious issues if it was non-metaphoric, but the presence of the word "gonna" makes it twice as shallow.

# posted by

Anonymous : 9:51 AM

man, has it come to me saing "lick me" on omeone else's behalf? :)

# posted by

Anonymous : 7:20 PM

dna:
Yes, lick Shereen.
Why the abuse, koll dah 3ashan el italics?
'Gonna' = poetic license. "I will" is missing two syllables, "I am going to" has one too many, and "I'm going to" drags its feet too much - needed something snappier.

# posted by

Reformed Cynic : 9:48 PM

What is it bezabt
You will miss about them?
What is it you won't?

# posted by

Anonymous : 9:57 AM

Actually
rigid Japanese haikus should not contain any metaphors ...
Only free-style haikus do .

# posted by

maxxedout : 7:54 PM

I shall do no such thing.

Creative license does not involve bastardizing language :)

In any case, it's your license. And try not to take me too seriously. I wasn't even expecting anyone to reply.

# posted by

Anonymous : 5:13 PM

Sounds Metaphorical to me!

# posted by

Faisal : 10:54 AM

how about "I'll surely miss"? ... or a variation on that..

# posted by

Anonymous : 6:35 PM

Whimsical charmer
petite, tiny, wee,
For a heart so grand.

# posted by

Jester : 5:02 AM

Are you dead ?

# posted by

maxxedout : 4:22 PM

aside: i love the invite poem by silverstein "if you are a dreamer, come in".

# posted by

c : 11:49 PM

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September 09, 2006

Nostalgia

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